• Death
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  • Sadness

    Poem Commentary

    If you have ever loved or lost someone you hold dear, you have wondered the same thing that I am trying to figure out. Why they had to go ......Wouldn't I like to know.


    You promised you would never leave me
    You promised you would always be there
    I held your hand as death prepared to take you.
    Sure I have my memories, that is what they all say
    But that is not good enough.
    I want you here with me
    I want you here to stay
    Every night I pray that you will appear in my dreams,
    So death can take me too.
    Just like a baby bird that fell swiftly out of his nest,
    I landed on the ground without a safety vest.
    Know one to guard me, Know one to care,
    who will be there for me
    As yell at death and plead with him to let you stay,
    I often wonder what will happen to me, today, tomorrow, or what the future holds
    I can't live this way
    It's not fair, I deserve to be loved, to be cared for,
    What about me?
    I can't say that I understand why you had to go, why the evil ones are still here and the good ones must go.
    I cant take this life anymore, living without you causes me too much pain,
    Mamma I miss You....
    Please take away the pain
    Cover me with your wings,
    Take me with you,
    I don't belong here, and that's the honest truth
    I don't fit in, and it's not fair at all.
    I deserve to be happy to...
    Mamma I miss you..
    Why am I so alone.........

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    wildpendigus commented on Alone


    I must say it's very good in style, the title and the content it tell exactly what kind of talent you have it is very nice and you paint a very good picture of your feelings, keep writing, you'll master your craft!

    SmileyAngel138 commented on Alone


    wow i felt the pain in every line, this is an beautifully sad poem, it was simple and beautiful..great work :)

    optimistic commented on Alone


    The thought of your pain oozes the page to release your misery of being alone. The gift you have hear moves on for yourself and mom, so don't dwell on pain use that pain as a gift of love for someone else to hear. Great write

    cliftondurant commented on Alone


    A heart felt poem who wouldn't miss a other love life goes on on and whave those beautful memory to cheer u up at time a good poem God bless

    KZ3 commented on Alone



    If I feel physically as if the top of my head were taken off, I know that is poetry.

    Emily Dickinson (1830-1886) American poet.

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