Cranium
I’m a blank canvas
Burning at the door
My thoughts are voluminous
Countless
They're storming at my door
Smoldering
A crying flame
Knock Knocking
A painted picture
A canvas
On my
Cranium
Door
Cranium
6 Comments
Poem Commentary
Me think i'm a little board. Back to work tomorrow. TG
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Poem Comments
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04-22-2010
- Love this poem. How well you have put into words for me, the confusion we sometimes have at what we are thinking and feeling. Great visualization!!
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04/22/2010
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04/12/2010
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knight4696 commented on Cranium
04-10-2010
- Blue - A very interesting write my friend. I love the metaphors ... You certainly say a lot in very few words! Nice Job! :) Ken
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04/10/2010
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Teardrops commented on Cranium
04-09-2010
- you see all kinds of picture bombing the mind at once great write thanks Marie
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04/10/2010
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04-09-2010
- Blusky// Nice metaphorical piece. I think you want "they're" in this line. (There storming at my door), but I'm not sure. I might say "knock-knocking" in L8. just for the rhythm. I think it would run together with "a painted picture" a bit better. Try it and see what it sounds like to you. It is quite interesting how you have tied all the concrete images together. Well done. A poet friend. RH Peat
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05/02/2010
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