Enthusiasm Fading

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    Enthusiasm Fading

    Some people use the sorry word
    a hundreds times a day

    They bottle it an say
    I love you
    and hurt you with dismay

    Disillusioned with
    "I love you "

    For It has flowen out the door
    Enthusiasm has spread it's wings

    detached sunder
    motionless     as a dancer
    Suspended in mid air

     

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    blackfootlady commented on Enthusiasm Fading

    11-29-2010

    And Honesty has not passed You by.God bless -Black P.s Saved to Favorites
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    bluskyinthenite

    12/03/2010

    thanks you for stoping by.

    dahlusion commented on Enthusiasm Fading

    10-21-2010

    A perfectly honest write that i can relate to completely. Bravo!!
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    bluskyinthenite

    10/22/2010

    Ohhh thanks.. someone brings my feelings out @ times.

    knight4696 commented on Enthusiasm Fading

    09-07-2010

    Blue - A very "enthusiastic" 10 from me! Quite the reflective piece .. you never disappoint ... Awesome write once again my friend! :) Ken
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    bluskyinthenite

    09/09/2010

    Yeah hmmm thank you Ken. The ups and downs of life.. Why oh why can't they all be ups... Wouldn't that me different. thank you for reading

    SuSpence commented on Enthusiasm Fading

    09-02-2010

    Wonderful write blusky! I loved the structure and the seemingly simplistic message upon first glance, but for those who look deeper there is much thought to be had. This was terrific, I loved it. I also loved the last line and how you tied the perfect picture in with the poem. 10 from me blu :) Peace and Love, ~Spence
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    bluskyinthenite

    09/02/2010

    Spence thank you. for reading my poem. Crying here need hugssss

    In science one tries to tell people, in such a way as to be understood by everyone, something that no one ever knew before. But in poetry, it's the exact opposite.

    Franz Kafka (1883-1924) Czech writer.

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