Poem Commentary

A touch of passion in what ive written for a friend...

J

J:  26 Lines

You become more intriguing every time i see you,
Playing the little chola role but are far from it,
Precious and tender you are underneath all of that,
You can fool the world but you don't fool me,
I see who you are and accept you fully,
You are really passionate and therefore affectionate,
Thus you incorporate,

Love, and lots of it,
To the right guy who can receive it,
I like being around you, it means i get to laugh,
It means i can reminisce later while taking a bubble bath,
As a friend you bring me joy, Joy I haven't seen,
Joy that brings life into this human being,

I like when we hug, its calming and I find comfort,
A few seconds of peace, away from discomfort,
I don't want it to end because it is peace that was a journey to find,
But in those moments i can feel your presence, your beauty, your divine ability to be kind,

And like me you are an artist, though you are shy to admit it,
I hope you bring out the passion you have in you in it,
I hope to create some works of art with you soon, see what we can create,
Bring to life the thoughts and feelings from within us innate,
I really can write a whole lot about you but for now i will hold my tongue,
Cant count my chickens before the fat ladys sung!

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Musicmynded1 commented on J

05-18-2010

very well put to words here my friend........................:)

Poetry is not a turning loose of emotion, but an escape from emotion.

T. S. Eliot (1888-1965) American-English poet and playwright.

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