So Close


  • Jayandben
  • Chillin' and writin' the life ^.^

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Suicide is the topic

So Close

I wanted life to cease
To stop dead
In its tracks
I wanted that
More than anything
So one day
Out of desperation
I took a giant step
Waited for the pain
With eyes closed and fingers crossed
My heart beating slowly and quietly
Inside of me
Death within my reach
I could taste it on my tongue
Feel it on my skin
And see it in my reflection
I reached out to grab it
It seemed so far away
In my hands
I could feel the cold air
Dancing all around
Just as I began
To curl my fingers
Around such absolute beauty
I fell
I watched that smokey demon
Cry as I fell
So far away from it
Death found such sorrow
In my simple entity
And quite honestly
As did I

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BringMeBullets commented on So Close


I really like this poem. I think it's great. In all honesty, I have felt the same way. You seem like a really great person, and I can't wait to start talking to you some more.



I can't either :) You're poetry rocks :P

In science one tries to tell people, in such a way as to be understood by everyone, something that no one ever knew before. But in poetry, it's the exact opposite.

Franz Kafka (1883-1924) Czech writer.

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