Taking Over


  • Jayandben
  • Chillin' and writin'...living the life ^.^

Poem Commentary

She feels as though she has changed and can't quite put her thumb on what changed her. All she knows is that the change was for the worst. Now she watches as the new side of her does things impossible to imagine.

Taking Over

The blood is on my hands
As it dries it seeps through my skin
I am so hollow and so forgotten
Every thought echoes within itself
My lies cast a flimsy web
Many dreams are crushed under pure desire
The memories poison my love for life
I'm sent spinning into another universe
Stained onto my face is a broken smile
Along with broken hearts
The nightmares catch me in their sweet lullabies
I'm lost in the demented thoughts of another
And that other has overpowered me
For I gaze into the mirror
To see an unfamiliar face
I sing wicked tunes
I've never heard before
My knife twists and jabs
But still I laugh and love
I'm shattered into so many pieces
Bleeding on the floor
Drowning in my other's pity
I die a little more
As my other stands wth blood on her hands

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BringMeBullets commented on Taking Over


Wow. This one is really great too! Ahh, your writing makes me so jealous. You have no idea. But I love this, mainly because of all the details that you have in it. I like the descriptions of the knife, twisting and jabbing. It's nice.



It's an older poem :) I've always had a great connection with it so I decided to post it. I'm glad you like it.

If I feel physically as if the top of my head were taken off, I know that is poetry.

Emily Dickinson (1830-1886) American poet.

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