You showed me

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    This poem actually doesn't have a name :/ I'm not good at the naming. So if you've got any ideas for the naming of ANY of my poetry, just comment :) thanks

    You showed me

     You showed me
    That it's alright
    To get nowhere
    In the fight
    And you showed me
    That it's okay
    To believe in yourself
    After all the pain and agony
    'Cause even after all the screams
    The helpless cries of despair
    Still you and me
    Will be standing somewhere
    Maybe nowhere safe
    But somewhere certainly
    And in this lonesome place
    We'll find serenity

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    BringMeBullets commented on You showed me

    11-06-2009

    HOLY CRAP! I absolutely love this poem. I love the line, "Still you and me will be standing somewhere." That is very neat to think about. This paints a really good image in my mind. I love your writing. :)
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    Jayandben

    11/11/2009

    Ha,I love yours as well! I like that line toooo haha great minds think alike ha and I wrote it while I was on the phone so I was scared it wasn't well written. I thought I needed to add more, but I read it to the person I was on the phone with and he said "there are some aspects that need to be elaborated, but there are some things best said the way they are" and so he told me it said what it needed to say. I hope what he said makes sense to you because a lot of people don't :) I'm glad I do because it isn't cool when it needs explaining, ha, you know???

    Dancer022597 commented on You showed me

    08-16-2009

    Short, intense and so to the point! Great, awesome job!! Kepp on writing great stuff and never forget your dreams!
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    Jayandben

    08/16/2009

    Thank you for your support :) it really means a lot to me :)

    lleeper7905 commented on You showed me

    08-11-2009

    Short, simple and deep. I love it. A lot of people find naming the tittle from the first line of the poem to be a good choice and it usually matches up pretty well but I think the last on yours should hold the tittle. Serenity.
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    Jayandben

    08/11/2009

    I really like that! Thank you :) I'm going to change it to Serenity :)

    Poetry is not an expression of the party line. It's that time of night, lying in bed, thinking what you really think, making the private world public, that's what the poet does.

    Allen Ginsberg (1926-1997) U.S. poet.

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