You showed me

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  • Jayandben
  • Chillin' and writin'...living the life ^.^

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This poem actually doesn't have a name :/ I'm not good at the naming. So if you've got any ideas for the naming of ANY of my poetry, just comment :) thanks

You showed me

You showed me
That it's alright
To get nowhere
In the fight
And you showed me
That it's okay
To believe in yourself
After all the pain and agony
'Cause even after all the screams
The helpless cries of despair
Still you and me
Will be standing somewhere
Maybe nowhere safe
But somewhere certainly
And in this lonesome place
We'll find serenity

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BringMeBullets commented on You showed me

11-06-2009

HOLY CRAP! I absolutely love this poem. I love the line, "Still you and me will be standing somewhere." That is very neat to think about. This paints a really good image in my mind. I love your writing. :)

Jayandben

11/11/2009

Ha,I love yours as well! I like that line toooo haha great minds think alike ha and I wrote it while I was on the phone so I was scared it wasn't well written. I thought I needed to add more, but I read it to the person I was on the phone with and he said "there are some aspects that need to be elaborated, but there are some things best said the way they are" and so he told me it said what it needed to say. I hope what he said makes sense to you because a lot of people don't :) I'm glad I do because it isn't cool when it needs explaining, ha, you know???

Dancer022597 commented on You showed me

08-16-2009

Short, intense and so to the point! Great, awesome job!! Kepp on writing great stuff and never forget your dreams!

Jayandben

08/16/2009

Thank you for your support :) it really means a lot to me :)

lleeper7905 commented on You showed me

08-11-2009

Short, simple and deep. I love it. A lot of people find naming the tittle from the first line of the poem to be a good choice and it usually matches up pretty well but I think the last on yours should hold the tittle. Serenity.

Jayandben

08/11/2009

I really like that! Thank you :) I'm going to change it to Serenity :)

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Walt Whitman, American Poet (1819-1892)

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