Are You the Savior

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    • Jayandben
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    Short, but it's an unfinished song I'm working on :)

    Are You the Savior

     Watch me,
    Hear me,
    Hold me
    As I choke on my last breath.
    Listen
    Closely:
    Hold these
    Words in your heart 'til your death.
    Maybe you can see around the darkness.
    Maybe...
    Maybe you can see the purity,
    Just maybe
    You can be our savior
    Of our hopes,
    Of our wishes,
    Oh, of our dreams
    For they do fade...

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    MarkKarmel commented on Are You the Savior

    12-13-2012

    you should finish it. you have a habit of being incredibly accurate with your words when you leave things unfinished.
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    Poetry is not an expression of the party line. It's that time of night, lying in bed, thinking what you really think, making the private world public, that's what the poet does.

    Allen Ginsberg (1926-1997) U.S. poet.

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