Visions of Me In California

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Visions of Me In California

On the night of a thousand excites
She left alone for her lonely home
In California
It was the perfect night to live her life
With dancing, romancing, and delight
In California
What she didn't see was the shadow of me
A knife in my hand along with a plan
In California
The blade cried as tears crept in her eyes
I shivered to think that she's on the brink
In California

Good Night my love
Wait for me in the moonlight
I've never been loved
By someone with stars in her eyes

Whisper to me about your life
Is this how you thought it would end
Did you think you would grow old
With children and grandchildren

I've had my fill, yet I still seem to lose
Such a soft face isn't easy to muse
It ends this way but I just can't refuse
That intangible thrill I carelessly used

Her racing thoughts couldn't tame restless feet
She started to fade as her mind fought to beat
Visions of Me
A wrong place in the night to only hindsight
It couldn't be seen by any of her daydreams
Visions of Me
In life she was plain; death will make her arcane
Lying in vain struggling to regain her dim
Visions of Me
What kind of secrets did she keep inside
What kind of mirrors did she use to hide
Visions of Me

Good Night my love
Wait for me in the graveyard's moonlight
I've never been loved
By someone with the stars in her eyes

Voices whispering to me about her life
Is this how she thought it would end
Did she think that she would grow old
With children and grandchildren

Such a pretty face wasn't easy to muse
I've had my fill, yet I still seem to lose
That intangible thrill I carelessly used
It ended this way because I couldn't refuse

Visions of Me in California

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sandyb commented on Visions of Me In California

12-12-2009

that was great. I loved it. I liked how it is set up..

Kaiprin

12/12/2009

Thank you. It's quite deviant, but its intent is not lost on the fact that it entertains. Again, thank you very much.

RHPeat commented on Visions of Me In California

12-12-2009

Interesting form. you really ought to find out what an iamb is a put a regular beat to your lines. a poet friend RH Peat

Rhymer commented on Visions of Me In California

12-11-2009

Wow! You had me on the edge of my seat with this write. Excellent write 10 from me.

Poetry is not an expression of the party line. It's that time of night, lying in bed, thinking what you really think, making the private world public, that's what the poet does.

Allen Ginsberg (1926-1997) U.S. poet.

Kaiprin’s Poems (43)

Title Comments
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Forsaken 0
Hatred’s Plea 3
Insanity's Fire 1
Walking in Circles, Waiting for Yesterday's Kiss 1
What Words Couldn't Say 7
Haiku Part 6: T(eas[e/y]) 3
Clarity Haiku 3
Forsaken Haiku 4
Why Should We Try? Haiku 1
The Evening News Haiku 1
Goodbye 1
Late At Night 2
American Ido( l / n't ) 3
Haiku Tangent: What Does It Really Mean? 2
When It's Over 2
Haiku Part 5: The Ghuzal Tragedy 3
Haiku Part 4: Appeal 1
Haiku Part 3: Prey 2
Haiku Part 2: Regrets 7
Haiku Part 1: Safe and Warm 8
Visions of Me In California 3
The Other Side of Me 3
Raindrops on My Piano 2
Look Through Me 2
Any Other Way 1
Changing Chance 1
As I Am 1
Apart 3
The Weekend Sand 2
Why Worry 2
As I Lie Here 3
Broken 3
Two 1
Here To Stay 1
She Won't 2
Slow Down Mister Steep 1
Unwanted Progress 2
Who's That Lady 3
Begin Again 0
Quitting Again 1
Hardly Hidden 0
Facing the Truth 1
Moving On 4