When It's Over

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  • Friendship

    Poem Commentary

    A friendship that was happy, but not everlasting.  Unfortunately, some things must end.

    When It's Over

    You warmly held my hand and our friendship would begin
    You thought I was your friend until the end

    The thought of you made my happiness ascend
    You thought I was your friend until the end

    We could openly express our feelings now and then
    You thought I was your friend until the end

    We shared a bond that no man could bend
    You thought I was your friend until the end

    But I hurt you in a way time can never mend
    You thought I was your friend until the end

    You wouldn't try to settle the score or cynically tend
    You thought I was your friend until the end

    Your tongue could mercilessly offend, though no harm did you intend
    You thought I was your friend until the end

    If someone insulted me, you would usually defend
    You thought I was your friend until the end

    Strength never let you blindly follow the latest trend
    You thought I was your friend until the end

    Amidst a crowd of strangers, your laughter would seamlessly blend
    You thought I was your friend until the end

    When I was too poor to spend, you would gladly fend
    You thought I was your best friend until the end

    Always there with a helping hand to lend
    You thought I was your best friend until the end

    Without you my life has slowly started to descend
    You thought I was your friend until the end


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    danmartyjake1 commented on When It's Over

    12-22-2009

    This is sad and heartfelt. I enjoyed the rhymes. Great writing!

    Rhymer commented on When It's Over

    12-22-2009

    Hard to keep a friend to the end. At least one described in your wonderful heartfelt poem. 10 from me.

    If I feel physically as if the top of my head were taken off, I know that is poetry.

    Emily Dickinson (1830-1886) American poet.

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