When It's Over

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  • Friendship

    Poem Commentary

    A friendship that was happy, but not everlasting.  Unfortunately, some things must end.

    When It's Over

    You warmly held my hand and our friendship would begin
    You thought I was your friend until the end

    The thought of you made my happiness ascend
    You thought I was your friend until the end

    We could openly express our feelings now and then
    You thought I was your friend until the end

    We shared a bond that no man could bend
    You thought I was your friend until the end

    But I hurt you in a way time can never mend
    You thought I was your friend until the end

    You wouldn't try to settle the score or cynically tend
    You thought I was your friend until the end

    Your tongue could mercilessly offend, though no harm did you intend
    You thought I was your friend until the end

    If someone insulted me, you would usually defend
    You thought I was your friend until the end

    Strength never let you blindly follow the latest trend
    You thought I was your friend until the end

    Amidst a crowd of strangers, your laughter would seamlessly blend
    You thought I was your friend until the end

    When I was too poor to spend, you would gladly fend
    You thought I was your best friend until the end

    Always there with a helping hand to lend
    You thought I was your best friend until the end

    Without you my life has slowly started to descend
    You thought I was your friend until the end


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    danmartyjake1 commented on When It's Over

    12-22-2009

    This is sad and heartfelt. I enjoyed the rhymes. Great writing!

    Rhymer commented on When It's Over

    12-22-2009

    Hard to keep a friend to the end. At least one described in your wonderful heartfelt poem. 10 from me.

    Poetry is when an emotion has found its thought and the thought has found words.

    Robert Frost (1875-1963) American Poet.

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