My New Path

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Balladeer's class, the villanelle.

My New Path

As Chopin weaves his lustrous spell,
I choose to roll the cosmic dice,
While I resign my dreams to sell.

I realize now why woe befell,
(Such naked greed will not suffice),
As Chopin weaves his lustrous spell.

Cathedral’s distant ringing bell,
Returns my inner fire and ice,
While I resign my dreams to sell.

Emotions shed, a storm to quell,
An unexpected slave to vice,
As Chopin weaves his lustrous spell.

Why did I seek the fires of hell?
Your conquered powers won’t entice,
While I resign my dreams to sell.

Your kisses cheap, no place to dwell,
Denied their once exotic spice,
As Chopin weaves his lustrous spell,
While I resign my dreams to sell.

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Madelynn commented on My New Path

07-01-2010

love it, love it, love it! What a gothic vibe! So antique, and so mysterious. Also- very spiritual. I can feel ..that feeling. I don't know how to word it, I only can feel it- and you brought it! -Cathedral’s distant ringing bell, Returns my inner fire and ice, While I resign my dreams to sell. -YES..that's what I'm talkin' about! Amazing! Love your work. Maddi

simoneaugustus

07/03/2010

Maddi, I am so glad you enjoyed this! Thanks for taking the time to read; I love your comments!

Maleficent commented on My New Path

06-24-2010

this is a lyrical piece very creatively put together with lots of imagery... write on! ;)

simoneaugustus

06/25/2010

Thank you so much for the lovely comments!

susanismith commented on My New Path

06-15-2010

I love the repetitive verses, it puts emphasis on the poem... the flow is powerful and creative... my favorite verse "Emotions shed, a storm to quell,An unexpected slave to vice" you have a way with words, and your vocabulary is astounding!!! You have a gift...keep sharing.

simoneaugustus

06/15/2010

Thank you so much! This was an assignment from Balladeer's class and I was fairly pleased with how it turned out. The real test for me is always seeing how others receive it, to see if I made my message accessible. I'm so glad you enjoyed it!

Poetry is what is lost in translation.

Robert Frost (1875-1963) American Poet.

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