chocolate mousse cookies and eternity (whichever lasts longer)


chocolate mousse cookies and eternity (whichever lasts longer)

 ya  ya  ya
 i  could  write
 all kinds
 of  flowery statements
 the feelings
 chart  hopes,
and other things
 but here it is:

the us
  that counts
 (I need not  dive
into some vain competition
 with myself
 or another
 in attempt
to get across
a point)

you can own my ass
 i trust
 your wisdom
 (and love
 open and giving
 lends itself
 to such)

I  feel you
 and see you
and know 
to the finest certainty 
you feel
and see
 me also

i look
 to the us
  and ask
 to pray

giving thanks..
 for  you
the love
that is us

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Allegra commented on chocolate mousse cookies and eternity (whichever lasts longer)


I love conversational writing. "you can own my ass because I trust your wisdom" made me laugh and I can relate to the feeling of this poem.

origionalmerlin commented on chocolate mousse cookies and eternity (whichever lasts longer)


as i often use forms in place of punctuation also to place pauses that the listener would hear if i read the poem aloud to them, this is an example, for those who mistake it for free style, they are incorrect as the roots of this are from a different plant altogether.. it is from music. Reply to Comment

pocketofdreams6 commented on chocolate mousse cookies and eternity (whichever lasts longer)


I'm fascinated by the shape of this poem, and the outline, and the fact that it had a true blue realness; applause!

Poetry is either something that lives like fire inside you or else it is nothing, an empty formalized bore around which pedants can endlessly drone their notes and explanations.

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