THE DEPTH OF LOVE

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  • Death And Life

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    I'm fear this is still a work in progress...

    THE DEPTH OF LOVE

      I stand behind you as you write
    And watch your pen fly o're the page
    No hesitation, no word trite
    As each line you do now engage

    The thoughts pour forth so full of life
    I'm amazed  how quickly it flows
    Words of our love and words of strife
    On and on your Passion now grows

    Over your shoulder I read each word
    Oh, how they strike at my heart
    My heart beat races - it's so absurd
    Yet now it is pierced by a dart

    Suddenly I now understand what it means
    A film comes over my eye
    You tell of your love and how it all seems
    But You are writing me a good bye

    I know you know I'm behind thee
    You can feel my breath on your nape
    Won't you now turn 'round and face me
    And tell me what you see is our fate

    I fear you are writing a letter
    To slip silently under my door
    Yet you write you could not love me better
    While I know I could not love thee more

    It's this damnable impersonal waiting
    As I stand here silently behind
    Watching as my life is abating
    With no future that I can now find

    My Dear. I can't live without you
    Your husband I know you don't love
    Somehow we'll find what we must do
    We are joined here on earth and above

    Now as you write I see a red drop
    Dear God, what have you done
    My thoughts and my breath now stop
    I see now that no one has won

    You swoon on the desk there before me
    Your hand no longer writes
    I take you in my arms and hold thee
    My heart no longer fights

    I saw not how it was taken
    The poison decided so fast
    My world was never so shaken
    Our love is settled at last

    As I lift you and lay you aside
    The bottle falls to the ground
    Bitter almonds - the scent cannot hide
    It was planned - then the moment was found

    I look back at what you had written
    The last line tell it to me
    "I love with a love that's forbidden
    "Yet a love that is never to be."

    The bottle - it is not yet empty
    Swiftly I take the last sip
    Together we make death's entry
    Together we take this last trip

    Together we stand before the Gate
    We both shall hold our heads high
    Love has conquered our earthly state
    Our love at last will not die.

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    SavVySam commented on THE DEPTH OF LOVE

    05-17-2010

    I love this passionate yet solemn twist on Romeo & Juliet...Very dramatic, and epic ending, or should I say beginning?!;)
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    Stryx

    05/17/2010

    I was standing there right behind her as she wrote. An interesting writing experience, Glad you liked it Sam.

    cheronld commented on THE DEPTH OF LOVE

    05-08-2010

    That is probably one of the most prophetic poems I have yet to read...I feel as though you channeled me or at least a former plea...it was both touching and romantically sad....Love like that truly can not die....thanks for reminding me....excellent poem..
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    Teardrops commented on THE DEPTH OF LOVE

    05-05-2010

    I love both verisons and would love it if you worte in the sands of time . Your are a gifted poet and i am lucky to call friend Marie
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    Stryx

    05/06/2010

    And I, you Marie. Thank you.

    Chaos128 commented on THE DEPTH OF LOVE

    05-05-2010

    Ha ha Romeo and Juliet meet Random House, and both are better for it :)
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    Stryx

    05/06/2010

    Ha ha, indeed. Thanks for stopping by stranger.

    Hampton commented on THE DEPTH OF LOVE

    05-05-2010

    Although it is difficult to compare to the first iteration, without having them side by side, I will say that it is lovely if not lovelier than before.
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    Stryx

    05/05/2010

    ;-) Thank you CH. It's better, but as I say - not yet best.

    A poem begins as a lump in the throat, a sense of wrong, a homesickness, a lovesickness. It finds the thought and the thought finds the words.

    Robert Frost (1875-1963) American Poet.

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