A moment in time

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Some will not like this. It is not from experience, yet I suspect it is a not an  uncommon Saturday night occurance. Creativity comes from the mind and the heart, as much as one's own experience. Yes?

A moment in time

Cards on the table
Chips on the floor
The smell of stale cigar smoke and alcohol
It is morning
and time to go to church

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countrypoet commented on A moment in time

11-28-2009

In a short and very powerful poem you have revealed a very good moral lesson.In order to present the image that we want people to see of us,we need to follow through on it all the time,not just on Sunday mornings.Very well written.Thank you for sharing this excellent poem.

stellar commented on A moment in time

11-06-2009

This is so nice...You tell the sermon briefly...Oh love it

stellar

11/06/2009

you show rather...

Stryx

11/06/2009

Images tell more than words. Thanks.

dmo8647 commented on A moment in time

10-12-2009

I like it very much......it is true and real and unfortunate.....thanks for having the insite to write the truth.

Stryx

10/12/2009

I have never been there - I draw from my imagination

jesusfreake commented on A moment in time

10-08-2009

this is us on every day of the week and when Sunday comes its time to put on a mask to shield our previous state of being....NICE!

jesusfreake

10/08/2009

hypothetically speaking, of course...lol

Stryx

10/08/2009

In retrospect we often do not do what we would like to be known for...

Chaos128 commented on A moment in time

10-01-2009

Strangely, the word that comes to mind about this piece is "pungent".

Stryx

10/01/2009

Yes - I guess it would be.

If I feel physically as if the top of my head were taken off, I know that is poetry.

Emily Dickinson (1830-1886) American poet.

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