Water Dance

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    Water Dance

    Water Dance

    plop, drop, drop 
    smell aqua in the air
    a long breeze against the trees
    the powerful deluge is near

    long awaited sweet release
    cries nature all around
    leaves turn out to increase
    greening on the ground

    thirsts are quenched
    before my eyes
    swollen clouds wrenched
    clearing the skies

    birds and creatures
    chirp and yawn
    nature perfect
    early dawn

    -M. Jacobs

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    Rhymer commented on Water Dance

    12-21-2009

    What an imaginative and creative work. Excellently done.

    danmartyjake1

    12/21/2009

    Thanks Rhymer, Glad you noticed it. I enjoy yours as well.

    coacher commented on Water Dance

    12-13-2009

    Awesome as mother nature herself. As I sit here in looking at the snow I can't wait for spring. This poem is as good as it gets. You are a real pro. Coach

    danmartyjake1

    12/14/2009

    I am pleased that you felt Spring in it. Thanks for your response.

    Madelynn commented on Water Dance

    12-12-2009

    Ahh!-I can hear spring calling..smell the earth, and hear the birdies-visual, perfectly contructed poetry at its finest!-thank you for the experience you have brought us, with this piece!-Maddi

    danmartyjake1

    12/14/2009

    Maddi, Thanx so much for reading it and commenting.

    bloomingsun commented on Water Dance

    12-09-2009

    This is a lovely picture of a perfect moment in time. Wonderful words, images. Thanks for the breath of fresh air.

    danmartyjake1

    12/10/2009

    I often want to express my personal feelings about nature and wonder if the true message really gets across. After your comments, I see that they do come through to the reader. thanks so much for your response.

    Stryx commented on Water Dance

    11-28-2009

    One moment in eternal time. Poetry betrays the feelings of the Poet - then to place them in the readers heart. You write well, M.

    danmartyjake1

    12/02/2009

    tHanks for sharing your thoughts and for reading mine.

    A poem begins as a lump in the throat, a sense of wrong, a homesickness, a lovesickness. It finds the thought and the thought finds the words.

    Robert Frost (1875-1963) American Poet.

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