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    Sexual... I would like to think so. ;)

    Acid

    I let the embers slip down my throat.
    The ends of my fingers met his.
    We laced each other's drinks with
    curiosity.
    The smoke filtered through my pumping heart.
    Obstructing the flow of normal thoughts.
    I watched a needle stick a bit, then slide into a
    crevice of his arm.
    His eyes rolled back, stimulated.
    As metal piecings beneath his lip glimmered
    in the foggy light.
    Our lips touched...

    Bed sheets held us under
    a spell we could no longer control.
    I spelt "love" on his neck with my tongue
    as he thrusted.
    My nails dug deep into his back.
    I felt popping under his skin
    as his moving spine released the remaining acid.
    We finished and listened to the violence of our beating hearts
    finally decrease to a normal rate.
    There, we lay together,
    sticky with sweat,
    feeling our lungs die.

    By: Brandi Deacon
    2010

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    JadedJezzabel commented on Acid

    10-16-2010

    WoW...........THIS IS VISUAL POETRY WRITTEN WITH A MATURITY FAR BEYOND YOUR YEARS....................I AM IMPRESSED!

    BringMeBullets

    12/21/2010

    Thanks so much. :)

    dakcalhoun commented on Acid

    04-17-2010

    god damn...i like........mistaked miracles are what made us

    BringMeBullets

    04/19/2010

    I conquer. Thank you.

    KagenoKitsune commented on Acid

    04-13-2010

    hmmm... i am not thinking your other readers have actually known LSD to comment on this poem with personal revelence, but you have described so vividly feelings and experiances that i've also had that reading your poem caused me to relive some of them. even one of my poems was written under the influence of this... magic. it makes the most normal of things become new and seen differantly, very happy to read from someone who has put thier experiances so eloquently as most persons are lost apon it with nothing to show for it but incoherant babble. very beautiful

    BringMeBullets

    04/14/2010

    Ha ha. Thank you so much... I can't say that I am proud of my experiences, but they make for amazing inspiration. :)

    fathermadness commented on Acid

    03-29-2010

    nice i really like your style. this a very sexy poem and a good write.

    BringMeBullets

    03/30/2010

    Thank you so much! :)

    jadedoll commented on Acid

    03-16-2010

    this is a very erotic poem and it flows really well. I love it.

    BringMeBullets

    03/17/2010

    Thank you very much! :)

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    Franz Kafka (1883-1924) Czech writer.

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