I Wish

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Sometimes this is how I feel.

I Wish

I wish you health.
I wish you innner peace.
I wish you light for the places
too dark to see.

I wish you wisdom.
I wish you well.
I wish you flowers
in the places you have fell.

I wish I could tell you
what I really feel inside.
I wish I could face you,
instead, I hide.

I wish you love,
and health from disease.
And to all the locked doors,
I wish you a key.

I wish you patients.
I wish you strength.
I wish you conscience
to go that extra length.

I wish you happiness.
But above all this,
when you finally find her,
I wish you a kiss.

By: Brandi Deacon
2010

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joanna commented on I Wish

04-23-2010

Simplicity is key in this poem, its purity shines like a diadem! Good job!

BringMeBullets

04/23/2010

Thank you... :)

Oblaidon commented on I Wish

02-25-2010

Nice ending. I like this line: I wish I could tell you what I really feel inside. I wish I could face you, instead, I hide.

BringMeBullets

02/25/2010

Thank you so much. :)

dahlusion commented on I Wish

02-25-2010

"I wish you light for the places too dark to see." — I love this line! "when you finally find her, I wish you a kiss" — oh, my! You are real, very, very real.

BringMeBullets

02/25/2010

Thank you, Dah. It's an honor to be graced with a comment like this. :)

danmartyjake1 commented on I Wish

02-18-2010

Simple, Delicate and Beautiful, wishes that I saved into my faves list. I like the style, flow and ending.

BringMeBullets

02/18/2010

Thank you so much. :) This one was different... But I like it okay.

knight4696 commented on I Wish

01-28-2010

This is a very sweet sentiment. Nicely conveyed! :) Ken

BringMeBullets

02/02/2010

Thank you very much. All feedback means a lot to me. :)

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