• Anger
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  • Effort

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    Angry times call for angry poems.


    I'm lost, but I'm still breathing
    Refusing to receive,
    the fake love that you force upon me,
    The love I can't believe.

    Forgetting all our memories
    Because they make me sick.
    No longer will I fall
    For your masochistic tricks.

    Reaching for your heart
    pulling out black.
    Feeling where mine used to be
    Before you made it crack.

    Shattered pieces, picking them up,
    trying to put them together again.
    All my efforts wasted
    On a life that's full of sin.

    Might be lost, but still strong
    Because I learned that from you.
    Standing up while your pushing
    trying to make me fall through.

    My limits are pushed, fists balled
    I won't take this anymore.
    My broken heart still beats
    Even though you make it sore.

    No longer needing your fake love,
    I'm stronger than that now.
    I know I'm going to make it through,
    I just don't know how.

    By: Brandi Deacon

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    danmartyjake1 commented on Rage


    I know this feeling of Rage very well, I wrote another Rage poem, hope you will read it sometime and let me know what you think of it, too. Great write. Keep writing.. you are very talented and gifted to reach others and to heal others. Use your gift for a positive purpose. I will continue to check you page for new ones.



    Thank you so much. You are very generous to take the time to read my work. It really means a lot to me. Thank you.

    MichaelTierney commented on Rage


    punch the guy in the nose it will make you feel better. and if that doesn't work sleep with his best friend. that will definitely piss him off! LOL. okay I am sorry for making fun.



    Ha ha. It's okay. Sometimes you need a little comedy to brighten up your day. :D Thanks for reading.

    westasker commented on Rage


    No longer needing your fake love, "I'm stronger than that now. I know I'm going to make it through, I just don't know how." With words and the transcendence that heartfelt verse always brings...... That is how you will make it through....



    Aww. I hope you're right. Sometimes things like that are so hard to cope with... Thank you for reading and understanding.

    dumplin commented on Rage


    Be strong, baby girl, this may happen to you many times in your lifetime, as it has me. Hopefully not, but one never knows. Please read my book, it will help you. "The First 41: Getting Past My Past" by Melody aka Dumplin available on Authorhouse.com among many other websites including Amazon.



    Alright. Thank you very much for reading.

    Cherry982002 commented on Rage


    I love this poem! It has so much emotion and rage! kuddos to you!



    Thank you very much. It means a lot to me that people are reading my pieces. :)

    Poetry is not a turning loose of emotion, but an escape from emotion.

    T. S. Eliot (1888-1965) American-English poet and playwright.

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