Adam and Eve

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    I wrote this for my youth group counselor.

    Adam and Eve

    Women are made of rib,
    and men are made of dust.
    He's got a special place in the sky
    for every one of us.

    A tree and a serpent so tempting
    A shrub of love and hate
    Something red and shiny
    their taste buds did dilate.

    They didn't know of bad,
    until the serpent slithered their way.
    Teeth met succulent apple flesh.
    and he, they did betray.

    So now you know the story
    and why we're born of sin
    Makes me wonder what it would be like
    if Adam and Eve listened.

    It's good he has arms that are open
    and a heart that's willing to forgive
    the man that was made from dust
    and the woman made of rib.

    By: Brandi Deacon
    2010

    For Jessy.

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    AmandaT commented on Adam and Eve

    06-22-2011

    Another great one! Thank you for reminding everyone of how it all came about. We sometimes wonder what would have happened if it all turned out differently...but we just know God is the Author, and He knows. God Bless-

    BringMeBullets

    08/28/2011

    So true! Thank you~

    optimistic commented on Adam and Eve

    12-21-2010

    The day this happen it killed us deeply what a great poem with niuce words that flow and great work.

    BringMeBullets

    12/21/2010

    Thank you... :)

    ESSENCEOFLOVE commented on Adam and Eve

    11-21-2010

    Excellent flow and word pictures. The funny thing about this story if Adam had not eaten the fruit we would not be born of sin but because he was so enamored of Eve he took the fruit and ate. Thereby they did not produce any children while perfect and had brought the consequence of disobedience on their heads and ours. Great write. It definitely get the juices flowing.........E

    BringMeBullets

    12/21/2010

    Thank you. And such a great explanation from you. I'm grinning. :)

    phatdaddee commented on Adam and Eve

    10-19-2010

    Great poem! Simple, honest and sincere, just the way I like it! Keep it up!

    BringMeBullets

    12/21/2010

    Thank you...

    CatsMeow commented on Adam and Eve

    09-18-2010

    Very well written, a great poem with sincere forethought, great word placement and smooth flow..

    BringMeBullets

    09/23/2010

    Thank you... :)

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    Franz Kafka (1883-1924) Czech writer.

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