The Iceberg Theory

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    I apologize if some things are spelled wrong.
    I just typed this up real quick out of my C.P. notebook.

    This was a reflection to a poem that my teacher read in class.

    The Iceberg Theory

    Normally
    I go for blue eyes.
    I've never found a boy with brown
    eyes that were so beautiful.

    I've told him before
    that I liked his eyes.
    And I like to refer to them as
    "The Autumn Theory."

    I guess that way
    it's easier
    than describing all the colors
    that sit thoughfully
    on the clear surface
    behind the lids.

    Today I learned something new.
    It's easy to like brown eyes,
    but the process of going from
    the blue eyed, Iceberg Theory,
    into the Hazel, Autumn Theory
    was much more
    meaningful.

    By: Brandi Deacon
    2009

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    MindNumbing commented on The Iceberg Theory

    04-21-2010

    The depth to this goes so far beyond just the colors swimming behind the eyelids, Brandi... I love the 'theories' and I wonder if the Iceberg theory has a double meaning.. warm vs. cold? Regardless... this is ANOTHER fantastic write from you!

    BringMeBullets

    04/21/2010

    Oh, thank you so much. :)

    Springsize commented on The Iceberg Theory

    03-20-2010

    I think it is endearing the way you experienced the closness of the colors of the eyes... which occurs in the pensive, sloow, eye to eye contact searching discovery of the other one, within...

    BringMeBullets

    03/22/2010

    Thank you! :)

    SavVySam commented on The Iceberg Theory

    03-15-2010

    I loved your "Autumn Theory"...The warmth living in a certain pair of eyes, can hold you captive...sometimes even for 28 yrs...lol Great poem, I enjoyed it so much!

    BringMeBullets

    03/15/2010

    Ha ha. Thank you. :)

    Helios commented on The Iceberg Theory

    03-13-2010

    I do not read many free verse poems from fellow teenagers because I think of them as " Love-is-Pain" Poems. They will write, trying to be sophisticated, but there product is mediocre. You; however, have created a poem that is simple,yet so sophisticated.

    BringMeBullets

    03/15/2010

    Thank you, Helios. It's an honor. :)

    dahlusion commented on The Iceberg Theory

    03-10-2010

    "but the process of going from the blue eyed, Iceberg Theory, into the Hazel, Autumn Theory was much more meaningful" — beautiful line and theory, as my eyes are hazel I will have to agree.

    BringMeBullets

    03/10/2010

    Thank you. :)

    Poetry is when an emotion has found its thought and the thought has found words.

    Robert Frost (1875-1963) American Poet.

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