Undone

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  • Lust

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    I like someone. It's lust, I'm sure...

    Undone

    My heart unfolds,
    revealing tenderness
    that cannot be broken.
    When we come undone,
    your pulse races.
    Your eyes are searching,
    and my shadow
    traces over your skin.
    Welcome to the beginning
    of the end
    for you and I.

    By: Brandi Deacon

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    alexander316 commented on Undone

    03-22-2010

    i love your cynical attitude toward love yet your paradoxical desire to pursue it.longing in relationships ahhhh the joy of pain for those such as us.always searching the blues for our red passion. yet love must come from within 1st and then it can be shared.i also like how short the poem is very nice.take a read of mine and let me know what you think.peace

    BringMeBullets

    03/22/2010

    Thank you very much. :)

    Skite commented on Undone

    03-19-2010

    My shadow trace over your skin..undone, you make me in gud way..:)

    BringMeBullets

    03/19/2010

    Thank you so much!

    Rainz commented on Undone

    03-19-2010

    Dark and leaves room for the imagination. My favorite type of writes :)

    BringMeBullets

    03/19/2010

    Thank you, Rainz, my love.

    Musicmynded1 commented on Undone

    03-18-2010

    You're Young...................... Lust is Good!... if it's gonna produce poetry.... then, let it lust.

    BringMeBullets

    03/19/2010

    Thank you. :)

    Poetry is when an emotion has found its thought and the thought has found words.

    Robert Frost (1875-1963) American Poet.

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