The Wings Are Falling Off

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    The Wings Are Falling Off

    She turned away from me
    and she didn't smile as she did.
    Casting a shadow over my life
    as her wings began to fall off.
    She said goodbye to what we once knew.
    I blinked and it was gone.
    I knew I'd see her again,
    but not in this life.
    When she's gone, she's gone.
    She goes somewhere too dark for me to see.
    There's this cliff,
    and below it's an ocean.
    There she resides and lets go.
    Her fingers skim the surface.
    Her glances freeze the sun as it rests on top of the water.
    Seagulls fly above-head.
    As their loose feathers enjoy the downward ride.
    Warm, salty, air reminds her of the times she was there for me.
    It was tough, but we made it through.
    She hides in caves
    that pepper the shore.
    In them she listens to the waves
    hitting the rugged walls.
    She counts the starfish that have died and now become one with the rocks.
    In some places,
    the salt deposits gather in large masses
    like the memories in her head.
    All she can think about are the seagulls and how they still have their wings.

    By: Brandi Deacon
    2010

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    danmartyjake1 commented on The Wings Are Falling Off

    02-10-2010

    This poem is utterly beautiful and deeply touched me in places like no poem has before. Bravo to You! Keep it Coming!

    BringMeBullets

    02/11/2010

    Thank you so much. This means a lot to me. :)

    WordSlinger commented on The Wings Are Falling Off

    02-08-2010

    wow, even backwards wow, this makes me want to find the cave, and talk to the Angel, very cool piece of poetry, ty WS

    BringMeBullets

    02/09/2010

    Thank you for reading. :)

    dahlusion commented on The Wings Are Falling Off

    02-02-2010

    This is a brilliant piece of creative writing, filled with elaborately laced surreal imagery taking the reader off of the cliff and into the beauty of your heart. The pleasure here is in your command of the language and your magical delivery.

    BringMeBullets

    02/03/2010

    Your words mean a lot to me, coming from a writer of your standards.... The fact that you can find beauty in my work is beyond me, but that you like it makes me very happy. Thank you.

    danmartyjake1

    02/10/2010

    Absolutely True,. Well-Said!

    knight4696 commented on The Wings Are Falling Off

    01-28-2010

    Brandy, THis is a very nicely written piece. So much insight for someone your age. The storyline and the imagery are both beautiful and sad..... Very nice work! :) Ken

    BringMeBullets

    02/02/2010

    Thanks again. I am glad that you like my work. :) Someone has to. Ha ha.

    Poetry is what is lost in translation.

    Robert Frost (1875-1963) American Poet.

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