• Rain

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    He told me to write about rain... And so I did.


    I watch in his eyes,
    a rainstorm
    fall over fields of hay.

    The plants grow heavy in this

    The horses pay no attention to this
    sudden change of conditions.
    A luscious smell of dew and grass
    rises above all this.
    And I watch it come to be
    through a cracked mirror.
    A yellow school bus drifts on top
    of ash puddles in the road.
    As the breath of many children fog the windows.
    I press my lips to the surface

    to taste the rain

    that now resides in small droplets.

    Gathering my reflection.


    By: Brandi Deacon

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    JudeDruid commented on Cloudburst


    i reeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeaaaaaaaaaally like this bull! it's awesome! ~Jude



    Aww... Thanks Jude. :)

    dahlusion commented on Cloudburst


    "A yellow school bus drifts on top of ash puddles in the road. As the breath of many children fog the windows. I press my lips to the surface to taste the rain" — this is nothing short of poetic brilliance. You are a poetic goddess walking amongst your peers. I am in awe.



    Aww... Thank you, Dah.

    MindNumbing commented on Cloudburst


    I am continually amazed by your wordplay, Brandi. You are the future of this craft.



    Aww... Thank you!

    Dano commented on Cloudburst


    yet again another very strong piece from you... write on...



    Thank you! :)

    Musicmynded1 commented on Cloudburst


    WoW Brandi,, another Bad-Ass poem here.... Write/right on!



    Ha ha. Thank you!

    When power leads man towards arrogance, poetry reminds him of his limitations. When power narrows the area of man's concern, poetry reminds him of the richness and diversity of existence. When power corrupts, poetry cleanses.

    John F. Kennedy (1917-1963) Thirty-fifth President of the USA

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