Quality of Life

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    For about a year I compiled all these bits and pieces of inspiration and put them in the Note Pad in my phone. Today I decided to put them all together. This is what I came up with.

    Quality of Life

    My Mama says I have a face meant to smile.
    But my feelings are too heavy.
    It's hard when you have a face meant to frown
    and a permanent noose around your neck.
    And when I try to run,
    I feel like I'm always being chased,
    persued by the greedy hands of men.
    When their beautiful faces
    and white lies,
    They make it easy to fall
    and hard to get back up.
    When my father says he loves me,
    he loves the virgin daughter
    that died a long time ago.
    So I will paint a picture and capture it,
    so he can remember me when I was good.
    Then I remember my boyfriend,
    my lover,
    and how his eyes resemble a
    wild mixture of Autumn and Summer
    growing old together.
    But later on, down in our story,
    he thinks I'm blind.
    So he spends his moon-lit nights
    carressing the hearts of others.
    He takes the stars right out of my hands,
    and scatters them in his broken sky.
    So he can watch me try to gather them back up.
    But when I think of our memories
    that smolder at the bottom of my heart,
    as the tiny embers flicker and trigger a violent heart beat.
    When he speaks,
    I can't help but to hang on every word and sylable.
    Somtimes I think he is better than me,
    but then I remember that he puts his pants on like I do every morning.
    So I guess I will let him take me all the way under.
    And when he wants to pull me further down, he can.
    I won't fight
    what my heart can't live without.

    By: Brandi Deacon
    2011

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    AmandaT commented on Quality of Life

    06-22-2011

    I love that you tell a story and keep the reader wanting to know what you're going to say next....Thank you! God Bless-

    BringMeBullets

    08/28/2011

    Thank you muchly!

    ArizonaPlay commented on Quality of Life

    04-14-2011

    love can be a doubled edged devotion,can hit you hard and then caress you when your trying to get back up filling your soul with confusion and delusions....but "love is Love" they say....

    BringMeBullets

    08/28/2011

    So they say... Thank you.

    If I feel physically as if the top of my head were taken off, I know that is poetry.

    Emily Dickinson (1830-1886) American poet.

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