Summer's Edge

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I wrote this after coming home from my boyfriend's house.

Summer's Edge

He’s warm,

Like a good hangover.

His heart pulses like raging thunder.

My mind develops, pupils widening.

His song envelopes my heart,

Like steam rising off a misty river.

Lilly pads pop against a still, gray surface.

Harmonicas and violins string out our love,

Like summer Christmas lights.

My senses race like a graffiti-sprayed train.

Carpet against skin,

He’s alive, and so am I.

Burning together,

In the inferno of our love.

Tying our imperfections together,

As if they were part of a denim quilt.

Dusty air, like an antique store,

We bask in each others company.

Waiting for summer.

 

By: Brandi Deacon

2010

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goldygirl commented on Summer's Edge

03-06-2010

very nice, obviously you had a very good time at your boyfriends house! I like how you use of methapors and oxymorons to describe that experience in a poem.

BringMeBullets

03/08/2010

Thank you... :)

KimberlySD commented on Summer's Edge

03-02-2010

Unique and thought provoking imagery. One of the best poems I a have read all week.

BringMeBullets

03/03/2010

Thank you! That's so nice of you to say. :)

danmartyjake1 commented on Summer's Edge

02-18-2010

Oh WoW! I rreally liked this one so much. "Senses race Like a graffiti sprayed train.... just gorgeous imagery! I loved every line though, especially the last one.

BringMeBullets

02/18/2010

Thank you so much. I like this poem too. Normally, I don't write so mysteriously. But I like it. It's fun. :)

Poetry is not a turning loose of emotion, but an escape from emotion.

T. S. Eliot (1888-1965) American-English poet and playwright.

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