Define Me

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    I heard some boy yelling at a teacher today saying that he couldn't be defined. It inspired me.

    Define Me

    Define me as
    pigeon wings,
    fairy dust,
    broken bones,
    or cricket legs with
    dirty hands that represent
    spiders
    and finger prints on the panes.

    Define me as a
    closed-off area,
    mind the caution tape, where
    cameras flash in dead eyes.

    Death is for free,
    and death comes fast to those
    who prepare for it.

    I am prepared...

    By: Brandi Deacon
    2010

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    frog commented on Define Me

    03-23-2010

    Wow. This poem is striking. I am curious to know about preperations for life as well.

    BringMeBullets

    03/23/2010

    It's a scary thought... Thank you.

    Qualin commented on Define Me

    03-17-2010

    you have a long journey of pleasing many readers...I enjoy your wit.and amased at your abilities at your age good write...Qualin

    BringMeBullets

    03/17/2010

    Thank you so much.

    Jayandben commented on Define Me

    03-16-2010

    Amazing! I love the comment of the fingertips! Eek you've got me tingling :D

    BringMeBullets

    03/16/2010

    Aww... Thank you!

    Maleficent commented on Define Me

    03-11-2010

    what a smart boy to say such a thing and a sharp girl to pick up on it and create such a wonderful poem! write on! ;)

    BringMeBullets

    03/15/2010

    Thank you so much! :)

    dahlusion commented on Define Me

    03-09-2010

    The fact that you understand that editing is a sculpting tool for enhancing a poem in to a brilliant piece rather then a good piece puts you way ahead of the pack. This piece is delicious in all of its imagery and conception. Your ideas are genius with god-like impact.

    dahlusion

    03/09/2010

    oh, and..... "Define me as a closed-off area, mind the caution tape, where cameras flash in dead eyes." — this verse sent chills through my spine. (hyphenate "closed-off")

    BringMeBullets

    03/09/2010

    Dah, you are lord of all creation. :) Thank you.

    If I feel physically as if the top of my head were taken off, I know that is poetry.

    Emily Dickinson (1830-1886) American poet.

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