Rain's Song

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Forbidden love, but who says it isn't already what it is? What it will be?

Rain's Song

I laid in the silence
and heard your heart beats whisper to me.

The blankets are soft and warm.
Your arms go on for miles, covering me
in bliss.

Pitter, patter. Whispering
This is how the rain sings.

I am so flawed. How can you accept me?
My head rests on your stomach, and you breath
so lightly.

Rain drops fall on the roof,
and I watch them trickle down the window.
Your breath is light.
I didn't know that you had already let me in...

By: Brandi Deacon
2010

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Skite commented on Rain's Song

03-19-2010

This poem touches so deeply, I'm lost at words, simply amazing from begin-end, but stanzas 4 & 5th, blown my mind away..skite loves it..:)

BringMeBullets

03/19/2010

Thank you so much!

viejay04 commented on Rain's Song

03-19-2010

"The blankets are soft and warm. Your arms go on for miles, covering me in bliss." - very well written =) a 10 from me!

BringMeBullets

03/19/2010

Aww.... Thank you! :)

Rainz commented on Rain's Song

03-19-2010

I am at a loss for words on this one... its as if my soul was a harp, an you strummed it, hitting all the right notes. That is so rare with me. My easiest 10 since I joined OP. And if I could give it a higher rating, I would!

BringMeBullets

03/19/2010

Aww... You're too sweet. Thank you so much!

Rhymer commented on Rain's Song

03-12-2010

Your words leave me breathless, each sentence seems to come straight from the heart 10 from me.

BringMeBullets

03/15/2010

Thank you so much.

dahlusion commented on Rain's Song

02-28-2010

"I am so flawed. How can you accept me?" — the honesty in this line is breathtaking. "Your breath is light. I didn't know that you had already let me in..." — again, you have my attention, for you are real, more than real, heavenly.

BringMeBullets

03/02/2010

You are too kind, Dah. You give me too much credit. :) I wish to be apart of this world with you, in writing. :) Wonderful to think of....

Poetry is what is lost in translation.

Robert Frost (1875-1963) American Poet.

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