Abandoned

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    My mom did kick me out. But I'm sure I will be back home soon...

    Abandoned

    My feet are cold...
    Dog teeth tear my soul out
    And it sits before me,
    hollow...
    Petrified and in chains.
    I explained how my mother kicked me out.
    And how it all happened so close to Christmas.
    I told her that I would leave and not come back.
    But where will I go?

    A couch there.
    A hotel here.
    The TV warms my thirty dollar room in a blue-ish glow.
    My mother's face floods my head.
    She smiles at me, waving, and heading toward a light.
    A light far away from me and everything I stand for.

    But yet, I still love her.
    Merry Christmas, Mom.

    By: Brandi Deacon
    2010

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    boomboom56 commented on Abandoned

    01-31-2011

    sad stuff for sure. you have a good way with words.

    BringMeBullets

    03/25/2011

    Aww, thank you. :)

    irreverent commented on Abandoned

    01-14-2011

    This is very sad, but also very well written.................good luck.

    BringMeBullets

    03/25/2011

    Thank you. :)

    Marsink commented on Abandoned

    01-07-2011

    Brandi, I had contempt for my dad (beatings) but waited till I was 19. This story brings out the beautiful and raw force from your writing and claws at the emotion of the reader. I hope you choose your friends as wisely as your words for this moving work! Applause Crescendo!

    BringMeBullets

    03/25/2011

    Yes. I think we have all come to find out that parents aren't always right... Thank you.

    BrokenHeart2009 commented on Abandoned

    01-04-2011

    I think this poem is brace and forgiving in in the dark times we must forgive. I like how you said you still love her.

    BringMeBullets

    03/25/2011

    Thank you. :)

    tenderpoison commented on Abandoned

    01-03-2011

    this is very sad - as the mother of several teens, I know things get a pretty hairy. be safe girl, the world is a cruel, cruel place at times.

    BringMeBullets

    03/25/2011

    Thank you. :)

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