Lyrics of Roses

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    Lyrics of Roses

    I figured you out
    through the lyrics strung upon the floor and bed.
    The rose petals that dried up days before,
    and the candles that burnt out of wax.
    And for a moment, there,
    in my head,
    I felt you pass through me on your way to the stars.
    If it were only for a second,
    for, within that second,
    I felt real.
    Your hands that plunder
    my virginity,
    or whats left of it.
    With your muscle tone and satisfaction,
    we found pleasure up against a wall.
    But you have gone now,
    to spread your magic across the face of the earth.
    And you began
    with me.

    By: Brandi Deacon
    2010

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    SerenityWintirs commented on Lyrics of Roses

    09-08-2011

    Oh my god, I really love this....It is going in my favs. The metaphors used in this piece are just mesmerizing. I especially like, "through the lyrics strung upon the floor and bed" and "I felt you pass through me on your way to the stars" and "And you began with me." All such amazing lines that really stood out for me. I also thought this piece was really sad. Tragically beautiful. I imagine the narrator looking back on a loveer and best friend that is now long gone. *Great job* Brandi!

    SavVySam commented on Lyrics of Roses

    04-20-2010

    Ah, changes....transformations...realizations...So many of those stars are there just waiting just for you to pen them into being...You've incredible gifts, not the least of which we've been privileged to glimpse here. Do keep writing!

    BringMeBullets

    04/21/2010

    Thank you, Sam. You're so wonderful... :)

    dakcalhoun commented on Lyrics of Roses

    04-17-2010

    this one is definitely my favorite...................

    BringMeBullets

    04/19/2010

    Thank you. :)

    Rhymer commented on Lyrics of Roses

    04-17-2010

    Love this descriptive and imaginative write. Unless I interpret the poem wrong you are speaking of your first love. First loves never part from the heart. 10 from me.

    BringMeBullets

    04/19/2010

    Very true... It's one thing that will always stay with you. Thank you for the comment. :)

    Dano commented on Lyrics of Roses

    04-16-2010

    'I felt you pass through me on your way to the stars.'... the entire piece is awesome but that line for me is so strong... another great write from you...

    BringMeBullets

    04/19/2010

    Thank you. :)

    Poetry is not a turning loose of emotion, but an escape from emotion.

    T. S. Eliot (1888-1965) American-English poet and playwright.

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