• Dreams
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  • Ocean

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    I had a dream like this once.. And a poem my teacher read in class today inspired me to write about it.


    I see you now, in my dream,
    the way you'd want to be;
    sailing away to some uncharted destination.
    The orange sunlight dancing across your face,
    and the evaporated salt water hitting the daylight stars
    in small glints like fireflies.
    With your sleeves rolled up, you drop anchor in the middle
    of the bay,
    solely to watch the seagulls fly above-head.
    You rest your feet atop a cooler
    containing three cold Coronas.
    And there you pull your hat over your face,
    and sleep in the misted atmosphere,
    careless to what lies ahead.

    By: Brandi Deacon

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    iLuvPoetryJACOB commented on Island


    I love the images......such a peaceful poem. I have a lot of stuff going on, but for a moment there i felt at peace, like this person who is at one with the ocean. Thank you. --Natalie.



    Awe, thank you so much! I am glad that I could bring you serenity.

    Hcg00 commented on Island


    I have to ask, if I may, is it about your father. Pretty dang good, I like the picture you painted.



    Thank you. And no, it's not about my father. It's not about anyone in particular.

    Dano commented on Island


    as usual the images are very vivid and alive... nicely written



    Thank you so much, Dano.

    dakcalhoun commented on Island


    It's makes me want to go sailing.............................................



    Hehe. Thank you. :)

    MalikPeterson commented on Island


    I keep going on and on about images but you paint them so well with your pen and I keep trying to find new ways to say it...but I feel I am failing in that quest and becoming redundant lol. I will let you know when your house of kudos is complete. Do you have any interior design requests?



    Ha ha... Perhaps a bubble bath with jets... Umm.... A big room full of fun instruments. ;) That sounds amazing... And a guest bedroom for my good friend, Malik. Ha ha. Thanks again.



    these requests seem doable...I will get on the phone with my team of builders and get your orders in ASAP. This thing is going to be huge. I guess I should use the flavored kind of kudos so I can nibble instead of risking getting lost while trying to navigate my way from the guest room to the kitchen lol. :)

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    Plato (BC 427-BC 347) Greek philosopher.

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