Restless Haiku

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    I tried my very first haiku. Not sure if it's good or not.

    Restless Haiku
    Restless, Relapse in
    These words that take breath away.
    Prevent pain in life.

    Your eyes, get to me.
    A sudden being myself
    dies, but still lives on.

    By: Brandi Deacon
    2010

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    KagenoKitsune commented on Restless Haiku

    04-13-2010

    i am liking this haiku of restless scilence of the spirit during the noise of the mind
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    BringMeBullets

    04/14/2010

    Thank you so much! :)

    danmartyjake1 commented on Restless Haiku

    02-10-2010

    Great Haiku. I have never been too good at it. But I enjoyed yours...
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    BringMeBullets

    02/11/2010

    Thank you very much. :)

    dahlusion commented on Restless Haiku

    01-21-2010

    Perfect in form. My mind wonders. Suddenly, understanding.
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    BringMeBullets

    01/22/2010

    Thank you. I'm honored to know that you've read it. :) It means a lot.

    BringMeBullets commented on Restless Haiku

    01-18-2010

    Thank you. That's very sweet of you to comment. I don't do these kinds of poems very often...First attempt. lol
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    kpeery09 commented on Restless Haiku

    01-15-2010

    Very Nice me liky liky...keep it up buddy. I give you 10
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