Love Like Salt

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    Poem Commentary

    I liked some of the lines in this poem.

    Love Like Salt

    "Too intricate to desipher."

    Music like loud thoughts,
    sometimes louder than the stomping of our feet.
    Kisses on the cheek,
    much warmer by my bedside.
    A smile like the sun,
    too bright for a dark heart.
    Flashlights in the windows ,
    secret messages with the switch.
    Fishnet begginings,
    but we patched up the holes.
    Loud vibrations in my mind,
    like a call I can't answer.
    Whispers around my lips,
    too soft to conprehend.
    Love like salt,
    sometimes sweet, sometimes bitter.

    By: Brandi Deacon
    2009

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    dahlusion commented on Love Like Salt

    02-08-2010

    "Love like salt, sometimes sweet, sometimes bitter." --- this is a sexy line. There is so much of you to yet to come: looking forward...

    BringMeBullets

    02/09/2010

    Thank you much, Dah. You are wonderful. :)

    MichaelTierney commented on Love Like Salt

    01-16-2010

    this is real good. I mean that although I am confused I never remember salt being bitter. maybe it should have said sometimes sweet sometimes savory? but what do I know I am not the one who smashed the mirror.

    BringMeBullets

    02/02/2010

    Thank you for the comment.

    calliope commented on Love Like Salt

    01-07-2010

    I like this,the metaphors are good and your right ,some really good lines here

    BringMeBullets

    01/08/2010

    Thank you much! It means a lot to know that people are reading my stuff. Ha ha. :)

    Poetry is what is lost in translation.

    Robert Frost (1875-1963) American Poet.

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