redemption song


redemption song

let the heavy silence reign
over this, my deep domain
waiting for the one who's made
to wield the legendary blade

come seeking to avenge a king
and blessed golden age to bring
though all is ancient history
through me unveil this mystery

time's wheel may spin around and 'round
but to it we need not be bound
for each new age brings new beginning
that with new hope comes fairer ending

anointed, called, the one foreseen
come to claim his destined queen
but first to master deadly dance
blood-red vengeance to advance

though he will be the chosen one
his journey's only just begun
to free the man beneath the scars
to claim his heart, his shining star

follow winding roads he must
seeking after what is just
when redeemed gift he boldly claims
his prison will go up in flames

and he with mighty warriors heart
shall his gifts seek to impart
inevitable direction set
to greet the King he's not yet met

over hill and field and dale
searching far beyond his pale
his solitary journey keep
while muted joyous tears I weep

at the verge, two worlds collide
that of King and loyal Knight
on whispered sacred heartfelt vow
unbent knees will proudly bow

with sword in hand I shall arise
from misty lake in new sunrise
this mighty weapon I unsheathe
to bestow on him with bended knee

the vicious curse that held me here
broken after endless years
tragic legend to defeat
the cycle I will not repeat

no ignominious exit make
back to my dreary prison lake
his fluid fire in love engage
his bitter heart no more to rage

I claim the role so long denied
to Lancelot a worthy bride
this time he'll no betrayal make
I am his Lady of the Lake

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SavVySam commented on redemption song


This is fine, fine work! The surprise ending was really like adding desert to an epic literary feast, in a word PERFECT! Loved it!

travisd76 commented on redemption song


I loved this one. I like the way you brought us back to the days of the knights and entwined us in their love story. Nicely written.



this was my first attempt at "epic" poetry, although I don't think it's long enough to qualify.

soulwriter commented on redemption song


Beautiful - epic - historical - mythical - and magical... sometimes I am not much for rhyme though the greatest poets practiced such meter with admirable artful control in that we still live there loves as if we were there... you took me to a new place with this piece and I thank you!

Poetry is finer and more philosophical than history; for poetry expresses the universal, and history only the particular.

Aristotle (384 BC-322 BC) Greek philosopher.

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