Digital Legs

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Digital Legs



I lose the words
the queens and the lords
in my life
they live with strife
they eat gluttony
they sin in my eyes
and they threaten to mutiny
how can i love
how can i accept
a god above
a god of neglect
i wish i knew
a better way
than to kneel
and pray
and hope for the best
they thrive on unrest
salvation for me
but not another
winged
alone
destined to hover
makeup
mascara
running tears in my eyes
from crying about another
as if he had a chance
so tired
of rummaging through
a stolen palace
im never there
when they are true
im outside asking
why the sky is blue...
i eat time
and its burning me inside
hours pass by
as if could hide
the cancer in my mind
and hatred burns yellow
till i fall asleep
and dream of mellow places
to be when im not at sea
and im not chasing sharks
or the remnants of arks
so it comes back to me
and my lack of imagination
my low station
me
myself
my human
my blood
my heart
the pumping never stops
feeds the art
that spews
my fingers
pollution
inclusion
some people think its worth reading
but we never touch anything worth keeping...
so i lose the words
in the maze of this world
that i created
this mental masturbation
so few people see
so few people get a glimpse
of what i might be
as i write words of pure fantasy
and hope someday
that others might believe
that this madness is not
a particular disease
its a world wide pandemic
with digital legs

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MalikPeterson commented on Digital Legs

11-17-2009

I dont think you have any problems with your flow. The one area that I saw knight comment on was actually the place where I was thrown off the most because you said yellow and the rhymed with hatred instead so if you flipped that then it would be a perfect fit. The mental masturbation line smacked me...I didnt think it was expected at all...maybe thats because I have never seen it in a poem. All in all it was good...there go those pictures again lol. May the kudos be with you. Cheers!!!

knight4696 commented on Digital Legs

09-03-2009

Very Very Creative!! Loved this one. Saved to my favorites. Keep up the good work!

AmadeusEx

09/04/2009

im glad you found my poetry knight, keep reading, i appreciate all the comments

Milkman commented on Digital Legs

07-23-2009

again another hit with me, I read it three times to get all the meaning i could, liked it more each time and added to my favorites, will read it again....... 2 things I would look at changing remove the line " this mental masterbation" just because its overused and predictable. the flow is grat with out it too change "mellow place" to "places mellow"..... just some suggestions.......I did love it

AmadeusEx

07/24/2009

i agree on the changes milkman, someday ill get around to editing all of these, thank you for the careful and constructive criticism, wish there were more out there like you

kittman101 commented on Digital Legs

06-29-2009

so much description, so many vibrant images mixed into a wonderous emotion. like taking an emotion and wrapping it with a mental picture. Then dipping it into timeless immortality

AmadeusEx

06/29/2009

one of my personal favorites kitt, i wrote this a couple of years ago, so its an oldie

Poetry is when an emotion has found its thought and the thought has found words.

Robert Frost (1875-1963) American Poet.

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