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    i wrote this one intoxicated


    they watch and wait
    change the channel
    always regret
    the morning after
    the negativity in empty spaces
    the lush grandeur in prideful places
    caught in the middle
    of something incredible
    there is no mystery anymore
    death at my door
    one more floor
    pick an elevator and die there
    each and every time we lie
    there is consequence
    in a sequence
    a deliverance of unintended delusions
    to someone you hold dear
    but keep far away and clear
    never stand too near to the places you fear
    we cant breathe in closed spaces
    highest elevations
    leave us gasping for morality
    in a world gone completely

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    Darkfire commented on ELEVATOR


    Definitly impressed me on this one. The combination of flow and vocabulary make the reader endulge in the poem like it should, great job.

    daydreamer23 commented on ELEVATOR


    whoa man that was really...really good im inspired man your use of language excellent, it just flowed perfectly,awesome



    thank you for the positive comment, i really enjoyed this one as well..hope you keep reading them

    jademelissa74 commented on ELEVATOR


    "leave us gasping for morality in a world gone completely asymptomatic" What a way to end this poem! The mystical phrases used to create this piece are absolutely incredible! There is so much reflection offered through tthis piece. You have a way to maintain the reader interested. Great Job my friend! I love your poem! One for One-



    everytime you comment, you leave such positive support, please continue reading because you have no idea how much i appreciate it



    tell me what you think of my newest one, faith of the unbeliever

    If I feel physically as if the top of my head were taken off, I know that is poetry.

    Emily Dickinson (1830-1886) American poet.

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