Eddies of Fate

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    a reimagined archived conversation

    Eddies of Fate

    In the middle of the irishman's laughter 
    shines a bucket of doubloons as long as a river
    and the woman he can't unthink 
    who makes him stink so sweetly
    of decadence and music
    in the smoky gloom of every after hour room
    in the perfect moments
    when he must consume whiskey or wine
    to disconnect and become divine
    there is no greater gift than the slowest death
    built upon the rocky sands that descend
    and steal his beauty, betrothed to another man
    no wonder why his age overcame his youth
    and a drop of liqour is always left
    in the last moment of truth
    before he succumbs to the night
    with a story he forgets to tell
    of his rebirth in the light
    and his unawareness of hell
    while she languishes in serene clothes
    hoods and deep plush robes
    beneath her skin she glistens 
    so amused when he listens
    to some sweet distinct musician 
    her eyes always give her away 
    she knows when he wants to play 
    she can throw him away with a word or two
    but she doesn't know him so well
    he's afraid to pursue but he desires
    to make her every wish come true

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    Springsize commented on Eddies of Fate

    01-23-2010

    your love for her is like the control you have of words... remarkably wonderful, fresh and sincere

    dahlusion commented on Eddies of Fate

    01-21-2010

    "when he must consume whiskey or wine to disconnect and become divine" I like this line as the divine lives in all things good and bad, constructive and destructive.

    ginga commented on Eddies of Fate

    01-20-2010

    Amadeus, I loved this. The composition is incredible and fun to read aloud. The rhyming is top shelf! ginga

    AmadeusEx

    01/21/2010

    thank you ginga:)

    Poetry is finer and more philosophical than history; for poetry expresses the universal, and history only the particular.

    Aristotle (384 BC-322 BC) Greek philosopher.

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