Dragon Fly

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    This is a fun poem with just a little bit of humor. What fun.

    Dragon Fly

    I dreamed I was in a battle with a dragonfly
    It's breath was so annoying
    It raised it's voice and roared real loud
    Like a fire it burned within me
    That nasty old dragonfly
    I tried real hard to beat it
    But the smell kept lingering on
    I tossed and turned and tried to escape
    That nasty old dragon fly
    I ran so hard it would not leave me
    I tried to awake then opened my eyes
    To find your face in mine
    With your mouth wide opened
    I exhaled with a sigh
    It was you my butterfly

     

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    Tempestlady commented on Dragon Fly

    02-06-2010

    The dragonfly seems to be a metaphor, the interlude seems to get confused between your dream world and the real world, all twisted and persistent. Liked it... Write on...

    Bettysrainbow48

    02/09/2010

    I am so glad you liked it thank you

    Bettysrainbow48

    05/01/2010

    Thank you,I am glad you liked it.

    cousinsoren commented on Dragon Fly

    02-04-2010

    Betty,, your DragonFly is an amusing interlude, writtem with poetic verve. You were having a nightmare apparently. Repetition of the line: "That nasty old Dragonfly" reinforces the niightmarish theme. The dragon fly is a predacious insect of rare and delicate beauty. We do not see much od them in Jamaica today. In fact, they are scarcely seen. Anyone who is scared of insects would naturally see them as "nasty"., but they are not. Betty, you have effectively selected appropriate words e.g, "nasty old: to express your aversion. .........LOL. The conclusion is drolly relieving and pleasing, you woke to find that you were dreaming of your your own butterfly harmlessly brwathing, asleep with open mouth..........LOL My rating for poetic subtlity and the humour of the transformation from dragonfly of dream to butterfly of reality. My rating is 9

    Bettysrainbow48

    02/05/2010

    Thank you very much for all of your thoughts. You are appreciated.

    gogant commented on Dragon Fly

    02-03-2010

    A cutesy little ditty. This has a magical quality about it. Nice one by you again, Betty..........................................gogant

    Bettysrainbow48

    02/09/2010

    Thanks a lot lol It gets laughs

    SavVySam commented on Dragon Fly

    02-02-2010

    Hi Betty, what a joy to read! This dream struggle end in peaceful contentment! ;)

    Bettysrainbow48

    02/03/2010

    This was a fun poem to write. It just came to me.I thought it might be funny.

    RHPeat commented on Dragon Fly

    01-29-2010

    Interesting dreamscape. I think you have an (r) on the word (fire) that you need to extract. And (damn) needs the (n) on it to be the kind of Damn you want. There is great humor in this poem. I had to chuckle a bit. Your butterfly it seems has the breath of a dragonfly. (it's all one word like butterfly, by the way.) Polish it before you send to an editor. There are magazines that specialize in humorous poetry. The wonderful fantasy and light humor in this piece is quite publishable. A poet friend// RH Peat

    Bettysrainbow48

    02/02/2010

    You are so cool ,Thank you I appreciate it.

    Poetry is not the expression of personality but an escape from personality.

    T. S. Eliot (1888-1965) American-English poet and playwright.

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