The Empitness within

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I write my poems as they come to me. This reminds me that if people love each  other unconditionally. Walking away from an arguments gives you time to think. Making snap decisions
are not always the right ones.

The Empitness within

It was just an argument
It blew like symbols
The thunder roared
It felt like no end
I couldn't find my way nor he
It killed my very essence
The man I loved lost hope
Hope the very core of our soul lie dying
The love I thought would never end
Was slipping away like feathers in the wind
Blinded by the sun I couldn't see his way
Pain I felt was only my own
With words exchanged no hope in sight
He turned and walked away
He left not saying a word
The emptiness filled my heart
I thought no way out
Left alone I didn't know what to do
The loneliness I felt filled  heart with emptiness
Was choking me inside
I turned to say I was sorry
You were gone
With my bags packed I opened the door
To see your arms outstretched
With your arms in  mine
Tears flowed like rain from the sky
My heart rejoiced with your embrace
My soul became one with yours
We  prayed Jesus take the wheel
And he did

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ginga commented on The Empitness within

11-29-2009

Betty, A poem that many can relate to as we all have our tempers to mind and often stubbornness gets the best of us. I love the forgiveness in the ending. The pain and worry can be felt by the reader here. ginga

sherry122 commented on The Empitness within

11-19-2009

A very beautiful poem, the thunder roared, but the outstretched arms made a beautiful ending. I was taken away in your poem.

Bettysrainbow48

11/29/2009

Thank you I really like getting comments from others bad or good.To better your work is a good thing.

Poetry comes nearer to vital truth than history.

Plato (BC 427-BC 347) Greek philosopher.

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