Daddys Eyes

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This is a story about a little girl who's daddy had a heart attack. She was peering out a window at  a shiny bright star with a quarter moon. A little girls daddy told her he would be there if she ever needed him to look at the star and quarter moon. It would remind her he loved her and it would be alright. Daddy was there. This to would pass.

Daddys Eyes

It was on a clear night 
Peering towards heavens door
Her daddies heart almost took flight
The little girl ran for help looking up
Saw a star quarter moon in sight
Brought back to her delayed in flight
With a  big star qaurter moon  in sight
She remembered it always
It was daddies promise to come back
Daddy passed in time
Heart broken she remembered his words
I'll be back I'll be right here
Many times in life trails came her way
A feeling she could not take
Finding the right answers lingered painfully
When looking toward  heaven
She saw the quarter moon and star
Daddies way of saying he'll be back
It brought comfort to her heart
She remembered what he had said
When the stars shines
I'll rock your heart with the moon
Daddy will be there it will pass
She only saw the star quarter moon
When she couldn't find her way
There to remind her it will be okay.
Daddy will be there 

 

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tierra7 commented on Daddys Eyes

01-07-2010

awwww Betty, this was too Sad...but soooo Beautiful...tears escape me..as i think of my children.....Daddy's are always our heroes...even in their absence...this was absolutely Beautiful Namaste...Terra @}-'-,.- (10+ )

Bettysrainbow48

01/09/2010

There is wisdom in your heart thank you.

Mareann commented on Daddys Eyes

01-07-2010

What we see in daddy's eyes often tell us a life long story-- I read so much into my daddys eyes, he was a man courage and strength! I loved him so! Mary

Bettysrainbow48

01/09/2010

Yes I really loved my dad too. He was a wonderful person.

gogant commented on Daddys Eyes

12-22-2009

Ahhh, Betty, all dads around the world, and on Mars too, would be so filled with happiness to hear these words from your beautiful poem...........................................................gogant

Bettysrainbow48

01/09/2010

You remind me of one of the fathers who loves his children and knows how to show it. Thank you

mangeoart commented on Daddys Eyes

12-22-2009

Hi, Betty. You have a truly sincere poem here, and very lovely indeed. You might want to correct daddies to daddy's.......just a thought.

Bettysrainbow48

12/22/2009

You are so right thank you

Bettysrainbow48

12/22/2009

Sorry typo I need a new key board but thank you My ddd key sticks

WordSlinger commented on Daddys Eyes

12-22-2009

I love this, priceless, and you have slung this, wow I'm very impressed, this line here Betty is so good, ///I'll rock your heart with the moon|||, whoo nice, ty WS

Bettysrainbow48

01/09/2010

I really appreciate your thoughts. It means a lot to me.Thank you

If I feel physically as if the top of my head were taken off, I know that is poetry.

Emily Dickinson (1830-1886) American poet.

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