The Night Moon

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Woooo the romance in life .What fun. Together forever !

The Night Moon

It was the moon so big so bright
That caught my eye that night
Within it's luster I saw you
It brought me to you
A midnight dance beneath the stars
I heard the band from across the room
Pick your partner please
You picked me and I you
We knew together forever
We would always be
As you held me tight
I knew right then
In the moment you'd be mine
I held in my arms the love of my life
In yours you held mine
Lets grow old together you and I
When the band plays our song
On our favorite night
We'll look at the moon so big so bright
We'll remember It was on that moonlit night
When together forever we knew




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EinStud commented on The Night Moon

02-01-2010

Awesome picture! I zoomed in to see your photo of the water/mountains up close, and I loved it! I think it is a great way to start a poem, plus I liked your title, "The Night Moon". I love the moon, moon poetry, and tonight there was a full moon, so it seems natural to read this poem. I like it. I must say that I am a songwriter first, a poet 2nd or 3rd or maybe even last... In songwriting, we write as we would speak. I quote, "...the moon so big bright" is better stated in a natural form (the way we speak normally), "...the moon so big, so bright". If you were doing this intentionally, perhaps to get the syllable count right, that is your choice. Just know that it sounds awkward in a very good poem. The poem is very well balanced and to the point. I think the poem is special because there is not a single living man or woman that does not have some special connection with another human being, exactly the way as you describe. You have a poem that "connects" with everyone.

Bettysrainbow48

02/03/2010

Hi you know that is the way I had it in the beginning then changed it. Thank you I think I will change it back.

Morris commented on The Night Moon

01-24-2010

Very good poem I like it keep on writing it helps people you don't even realize they are not alone in this world.

Bettysrainbow48

01/26/2010

I see what you mean thank you very much for your input.

peacefully commented on The Night Moon

01-17-2010

this is absolutely wonderful. Is it as song as well as a poem. I think these lyrics would be wonderful in a song.

Bettysrainbow48

01/19/2010

You know I really appreciate your thoughts.Thank you

Bettysrainbow48

01/26/2010

Oh thank you so much.I appreciate the thought.

SavVySam commented on The Night Moon

01-17-2010

And at a glance you knew...So right and true this is just how it happens! Lovely poetic share of a special moment locked forever in your hearts! Nice work!

Bettysrainbow48

01/19/2010

I love writing love poems. It is easy when you have been soul mates.

cousinsoren commented on The Night Moon

01-16-2010

It gets even worse when the initial "eye" is missing from "immortalized", extraordinary has lot an "a" and MEMORIES has exxhanged its "O" for another "E".

Bettysrainbow48

01/17/2010

Well I was wondering if typos count against us in poetry ? Proof reading should take care of that I guess.You can't go back until after the contest.

To have great poets there must be great audiences too.

Walt Whitman, American Poet (1819-1892)

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