predator

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    This poem was a dramatic change from my typical style; but payed off and made me feel extremely validated by my win with it.  As for the poem;  I intentionaly left it open to allow the reader to draw their own conclusions To let them fill in the blanks in their own minds as to whether the predator is man or beast; and what the outcome might be.  Perhaps as requested there may be a follow up to predator; we will see.

    predator

    Into the night I wandered,

    pondering;

    the cloak of darkness.

    Darkness,

    that surrounded my very soul.

    When from the silent abyss.

    A feeling; not a sound or vision,

    touched my trembling skin.

    The hair at my nape,

    danced in nervous wonder.

    Sensing the eyes;

    gauging my worth.

    knowing soon,
    I would know my predators intent.

    Would I shiver in desire,
    or cry out for my very existence?

    Would the outcome be quick,
    over in but a heartbeat?

    Or, would my stalker toy with me,
    drawing out its desires upon my very soul.

     Would I survive,

    to once again;

    ponder the cloak of darkness?

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    rachel354 commented on predator

    11-16-2010

    wow! this is very good! once i started reading i couldn't stop, you write amazing poems. good job! very creative!
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    sewelli54 commented on predator

    01-27-2010

    I must say I liked this one very much, it was intriguing walking along the corridors of your mind, wandering in the darkness of night in your fantasy world pondering as a predator for the the cloak of darkness that surrounds your soul. Excellant.
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    Mextizo commented on predator

    01-12-2010

    this one is great i likes keep it up where i live theres lots of predators
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    stever commented on predator

    11-29-2009

    im so happy for your win!!!!!! and this a great poem
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    CongoNetherland commented on predator

    11-24-2009

    Very cool mood; both psychological and philosophical. Nice circular ending too. Those are very good. However, and I hate to be a stick in the mud here but . . . punctuation abuse is a punishable offense. Somewhere. I know semi colons are great on the page, but they can be done without if you don't know where they go. I think it was Ezra Pound who believed we should do away with most punctuation anyway. A great book on this is "Eats, Shoots and Leaves: The Zero Tolerance Approach to Punctuation" by Lynn Truss. Otherwise, this poem does a great job of touching on the fear and wonderment of the unknown, the future and relationships that we all have and have had. Great song!
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    am2anangel

    11/24/2009

    I'll definitely ave to look into reading that, I know my punctuation is terrible. I write how I talk and try to put pauses in. lol! Unfortnately not the right punctuations in the right places.

    To have great poets there must be great audiences too.

    Walt Whitman, American Poet (1819-1892)

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