DRAGON SLAYER REWRITE

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    several people had commented on my original dragon sleigher being to short. so I added to the tale and produced this rewrite. I hope it's enjoyed.

    DRAGON SLAYER REWRITE

     

    Magical sands of time,

     Sweep in to take hold.

     There beyond the mist stands the knight,

    So bold.

     

    He stands his ground,

    While faced with the beast,

    who breaths fire.

    To slay him,

    his only desire.  

    The dragon’s scales,

                        have shielded every knights attempt,

    To slay the beast,

    They hold in contempt.

    Light reflects,

    Then explodes,

    Against his sword held high.

     The earth erupts with the demons sigh.

     

    The knight lunges in for the kill.

     Evading every thrust,

    The beasts lungs fill.

     

    Preparing for his fiery breath.

     The dragon anticipates the knights swift death.

     

    With swift movements born from lessons past,

    The knight charges in

    Stealing the demon’s breath at last.

     

    The knight turns to retrieve his treasure.

     

    For within the dragons cave he’d guarded,

     

    The princess who’s

    Beauty was beyond any measure.

     

    With a silent bow

    Of respect he’s paid,

    He wins the heart

    Of the lovely maid.

     

    By killing the beast who terrorized,

    This land.

     

    He was promised,

     the lovely maidens hand.

     

     

     

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    spbsdude commented on DRAGON SLAYER REWRITE

    02-22-2010

    some nice images and I think a metaphor for all who have dragons in their lives. May we all be able to slay them. Very lyrical.
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    Lolee commented on DRAGON SLAYER REWRITE

    02-06-2010

    Lovely. A completely different poem, I'd say...which means you have two good poems with legs of their own. Great job, poet!
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    Panaramicpoet commented on DRAGON SLAYER REWRITE

    02-05-2010

    Very majestic . .and valiant . .very well written. . .thank for letting me in on it
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    SavVySam commented on DRAGON SLAYER REWRITE

    01-27-2010

    I thoroughly enjoyed reading this poetic tale of chivalry! Very entertaining read!
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    inkmaster commented on DRAGON SLAYER REWRITE

    01-27-2010

    Great write am2anangel! I liked the flow of the poem..It is a pleasure to read...Inkmaster
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